My feedback from other first drafts - Commute

There is evidence of X in the creative use of most of the following technical skills.	Level 1- Minimal 0-23	Level 2 – Basic 24-35	Level 3 – Proficient 36-47	Level 4 – Excellent 48-60
Holding a shot steady where appropriate				Every shot that was supposed to be still was, I especially liked the shot of the ticket coming out of the machine.
Framing a shot, including and excluding elements as appropriate			Because the opening is clearly set in modern times it is pretty easy to make sure that there are no elements that shouldn’t be there.
Using a variety of shots and distances			There was a lot of different shots but I don’t think there was a long shot. The close ups and tracking shots were really good.
Using titles appropriately (consider font, colour, length on screen, order)		The font on the few titles you have are very good but you need to put the rest of the titles in and make sure they are in the right order.
Selecting mise en scene including colour, figure, lighting, objects and setting				The train station as a setting was very good and you played it off really well.
Editing so that meaning is apparent to the viewer		There is a lot of black screens where there is a lot of pauses, these need to be sorted.
Using varied shot transitions and other effects selectively			The shot transitions are very good and the effects are also good.
Using sound with images and editing				The music used throughout the whole opening is perfect and creates enigma.
Grading and Comments-  www/ebi (I really liked/ The film opening would be so much better if)	Overall I felt like the opening was really good and when all of the titles are added it will make it even better. I also think that the black screens need to be sorted as they are too long.