My feedback from other first drafts - A Dame With a Clue

 

There is evidence of X in the creative use of most of the following technical skills.	Level 1- Minimal 0-23	Level 2 – Basic 24-35	Level 3 – Proficient 36-47	Level 4 – Excellent 48-60
Holding a shot steady where appropriate				Every steady shot was perfect and it was in all the right places.
Framing a shot, including and excluding elements as appropriate				All the shots were perfect in sticking with the time period this film is supposed to be set in.
Using a variety of shots and distances				The over the shoulder shots of the conversation between the two characters were especially good and also when looking at the note in the dame’s hand. There was also shots at all of the different distances.
Using titles appropriately (consider font, colour, length on screen, order)				The font is brilliant in sticking with the time period and also the transition of the red font at the start into the black and white shows that it is an old style film but made in modern times. The order of the titles also seemed to be correct.
Selecting mise en scene including colour, figure, lighting, objects and setting				The setting was also really good in staying on track with the theme. The fact that it was black and white also showed the time period well.
Editing so that meaning is apparent to the viewer				The editing was also extremely good.
Using varied shot transitions and other effects selectively			The way in which the colour of the font changes is really good but other than that there was not really anymore effects that I noticed.
Using sound with images and editing				The music went really well with what was being shown.
Grading and Comments-  www/ebi (I really liked/ The film opening would be so much better if)	Overall I think that the film opening is extremely well done and is very clear what is going on. I think that when the voiceover is playing it is sometimes quite hard to understand but other than that it is amazing.